How to Write a Strong Thesis


1st story: Describes a topic; gives the facts; makes an observation. This level of thesis makes observations that are non-controversial (i. e. no reasonable person would disagree with them). A person reading such a thesis immediately thinks: “Yes, this is true.”

2nd story: Interprets, gives a point of view on, and/or adds controversy to the facts of the first story. By adding controversy, I mean it takes a position on the facts that is not obvious, a position that a reasonable person could disagree with. A person reading a 2-story thesis thinks: “That's an interesting point of view; now prove it to me.” By controversial, I do not mean this thesis has to be absurd or idiosyncratic; you'll never be able to convince your reader of that kind of argument. Rather, I mean it takes one position out of a number of positions.

3rd story: Relates the 2-story thesis to the bigger picture, explains its significance, sets it a new context. This is the most difficult type of thesis to describe (and write) because it can take so many forms. I find it helpful to think of this story “opening out” - as if though a skylight - to a wider view. It is the answer you get when you ask of a 2-story thesis, “so what?” The reader should say: “I see why this argument matters.” The pitfall in this type of thesis, that you want to be careful to avoid, is that it can get too ambitious, and try to make a bigger claim that you're able to substantiate (e.g. “My analysis of Sonnet 18 shows that all Western poetry is morally bankrupt and self-serving.”)

Examples

1st story: The U by Kotex “Apology” advertisement employs a sarcastic spokesperson, parodies of other advertisements, and the slogan “break the cycle.”

2nd story: The U by Kotex “Apology” advertisement employs a sarcastic spokesperson, parodies of other advertisements, and the slogan “break the cycle” in order to persuade young, female audiences that if they purchase their tampon they can also buy an edgy, anti-commercial personality as well.

3rd story: The U by Kotex “Apology” advertisement employs a sarcastic spokesperson, parodies of other advertisements, and the slogan “break the cycle” in order to persuade young, female audiences that if they purchase their tampon they can also buy an edgy, anti-commercial personality as well. By implementing a “counter television” style, “Apology” critiques other advertisements but in doing so illustrates that even an anti-commercial stance can be used for marketing purposes.

4th Story!: There's no need for your essay to read like a list. Revise your thesis so that it flows more naturally.

The U by Kotex “Apology” advertisement attempts to persuade its young female audience through parodying and criticizing other tampon commercials, suggesting that even an anti-commercial stance can be repurposed for the sake of marketing.

In this example, you would still discuss those aspects listed above in the body of your essay, but there's no need for you to give a run down at the beginning of your paper. As you can see, each story depends on the one below it. It is difficult, to say the least, to build a three-story house without a first story. The same holds true with a thesis: a two-story thesis needs a first story, and a three-story thesis needs a first and second story.